writers' tips #1,600,042: "blunt", use of

[cimorene]

i am getting so sick of the "blunt" fingers that are always used for lubing of the ass preparatory to fucking.  blunt cocks too, for that matter. 

it's not that fingers and cocks aren't blunt.  it's that there are 1,600,042 reasons not to use that particular adjective there, starting with "what else would it be--sharp?"/"they aren't that blunt, actually" and going all the way down to "well, THAT'S an image."

smut writers, please--if you're writing a sex scene that's meant to be arousing, if something is entering someone's ass as PART of the sex--think of your poor readers, and consider how the penetratee might actually, in 1,600,042 years, think about the penetrating thing.  then check it against your mental database of words that have already been used in smut scenes 1,600,042 times or more, and if it pops up there, don't use it.

Comments

[dementordelta.livejournal.com]

MMMmmmmmm Blunt cocks.....

Er, sorry, what were you saying, dear?

[cimness.livejournal.com]

right, so, how do you feel about pointy ones then? are there any cocks that could be called not blunt? i mean... they all have a head.

[dementordelta.livejournal.com]

Still, it's just a reinforcement technique, to put the reader *right* there. Like saying 'white snow'. It just emphasizes the thing we all know, without having to come up with a description that just yanks you out of the story.