That's interesting to hear - I know from my own experience that writing first person is such a daunting thing - making it consistent, believable, that's all really hard if you think about it too much. Maybe the way to do it is to *not* think about it too much but do it more intuitively.

And I'd be delighted (and flattered to be asked) to beta your story. Just send it on to me when it's ready.