i used to try to make it more lyrical or whatever, but i realised gradually that people like to read what i call "porn"--graphic smut that's paced sort of like sex and, well, seeks to arouse. but i also get bored with sex scenes that don't seem to have anything to do with the plot and i often skim them, so i got nervous. you know, "i've already written seven pages of sex. how many times can one thrust into/lick the other?" and... i was... trying to... be different or something. avoid boredom! but i don't think it's boring now. so actually, who knows? maybe i wasn't in the mood for getting jiggy when i wrote them the first time. XD