sex scenes

[cimorene]

sometimes it's easy to write good sex and sometimes it's hard. the first night's sex in my story is graphic and porny and hot, and the later stuff--skims over important bits with metaphors and talking about feelings because it's afraid to bore itself or the reader with repetitiveness or get too embarrassingly self-absorbed.

but why? where did the good, unashamedly porny sex go? i can't let this story out into the public domain until it's at least evened up a bit.

edit. well, um, there it was. heh.

Comments

[schonste.livejournal.com]

Good, get all that hardcore action in there. Metaphorical pr0n is so much less satisfying. XD

[cimness.livejournal.com]

i agree completely.

it's a copout too. uh, well, maybe not ALL the time, but.

[schonste.livejournal.com]

Yes. It is, most of the time. Especially when you read like a huge novel-fic and the sex isn't really sex the whole time, and by the end of the fic it's STILL not really sex and the whole damn thing was one huge bout of sexual tension. jalkfsdsfakl;sfa.

Only read one fic like that. V. frustrating, that tension. XD

[cimness.livejournal.com]

i used to try to make it more lyrical or whatever, but i realised gradually that people like to read what i call "porn"--graphic smut that's paced sort of like sex and, well, seeks to arouse. but i also get bored with sex scenes that don't seem to have anything to do with the plot and i often skim them, so i got nervous. you know, "i've already written seven pages of sex. how many times can one thrust into/lick the other?" and... i was... trying to... be different or something. avoid boredom! but i don't think it's boring now. so actually, who knows? maybe i wasn't in the mood for getting jiggy when i wrote them the first time. XD