more than 100K of singin in the rain-based threesome fic, revised to nc-17 rating, 45-page length, hopefully funny and uplifting. i mean, i can just post without a beta, but it's *awfully* long for that.
i'm looking for an opinion with more distance than mine has. to tell me if you can't follow something, or if i get too mushy, or if the sex doesn't segue well into the rest of the text. y'know.
It's been ten days since you posted this, but I just wandered into your journal.
If you would like another person to look at it, I would be more than glad to nitpick. Otherwise, I shall simply expire of joy when you post the finished product.
Huh; it doesn't look dark to me. Perhaps it's a screen difference. When I get ambitious again I may well lighten it. Thanks for the comment.
Yes, it is my favorite scene, actually. They're so Cute.
I can't write SitR very /well/ -- the vaudevillian banter does not come naturally to me -- but I've tried. My fic site (http://romantic.frenchboys.net/petra/) has a brief Don/Cosmo, a threesome drabble, and Kathy/Lena simply because I wanted to see if it could work.
this monitor is my uncle's, and it's high-res and very expensive but weird. sometimes things (particularly screencaps, grr) show up dark and hard to distinguish.
i read your little snippets but they're mere mouthfuls! so short! i couldn't make myself read kathy/lina. it's just so... ah. you know. i *was* thinking about putting lina with zelda. i think that could work.
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i'm looking for an opinion with more distance than mine has. to tell me if you can't follow something, or if i get too mushy, or if the sex doesn't segue well into the rest of the text. y'know.
thanks a mil! <3
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If you would like another person to look at it, I would be more than glad to nitpick. Otherwise, I shall simply expire of joy when you post the finished product.
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you know, the picture's rather dark there. your icon i mean. you should lighten it.
is that your favorite scene, too?
'oh, don! you're a genius!'
'well, i'm glad you thought of it.'
'oh, cosmo.' ::kiss::
:O!
if you're a sitr threesome fan i may have to friend you.
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Yes, it is my favorite scene, actually. They're so Cute.
I can't write SitR very /well/ -- the vaudevillian banter does not come naturally to me -- but I've tried. My fic site (http://romantic.frenchboys.net/petra/) has a brief Don/Cosmo, a threesome drabble, and Kathy/Lena simply because I wanted to see if it could work.
I may have to friend you likewise.
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this monitor is my uncle's, and it's high-res and very expensive but weird. sometimes things (particularly screencaps, grr) show up dark and hard to distinguish.
i read your little snippets but they're mere mouthfuls! so short! i couldn't make myself read kathy/lina. it's just so... ah. you know. i *was* thinking about putting lina with zelda. i think that could work.