cimorene: cartoony drawing of a woman's head in profile giving dubious side-eye (i kind of dig this)
Cimorene ([personal profile] cimorene) wrote2008-11-06 10:14 pm

rookie mistake

Dear Badthors,

Please remember that commas don't go between nouns and the adjectives describing them!

Thank You,
Cim

[identity profile] revulo.livejournal.com 2008-11-06 08:20 pm (UTC)(link)
"She bit into the green, apple, smiling. Her brown eyes, orbs of chocolate, sparkled in delight."

That hurt to write. I shall never do that again.

[identity profile] cobweb-diamond.livejournal.com 2008-11-07 12:07 am (UTC)(link)
well your just a big, meanie.

[identity profile] medize.livejournal.com 2008-11-07 03:01 am (UTC)(link)
You're totally, correct.