Cimorene

i'd be happy to chat with you if you have aim or y!m or msn m and would like to give me your sn--mine is cimthing.

basically, it's hard to avoid the feeling of the moral with groundhog day because it's a story about how he was doing the wrong thing, and when he finally gets it 'right,' he doesn't have to do it over anymore. in the movie it was making it the perfect day or something. and in your story, it sort of seemed like it was... well... at first it seemed to be moving towards the idea that the magic combination was, like, coming to terms with how important billy was to him--accepting it, and going on with life (in that there's some material about how he stopped trying so hard with the other stuff, but still tried some damage control vis a vis liv's dress, etc), but still being billy-wanting.

also, there seems to be that sense throughout the beginning that he's moving towards the right thing (also like the movie), but i guess it strengthened the expectation that there was going to be an *answer.* then there's the panic before billy comes--which is sweet and a little romantic. but it distracted me from that idea of the moral somewhat. and then the ending came before i had time to make up my mind entirely what it was about.

(however, much applause for not over-doing the ending. the happy note without the choirs of angels singing while they kiss and declare love or whatever--which is what you could expect in many slash stories.)