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Okay... NOW I'm officially sick. plz pass the Sudafed. kthx.

Oh, and I agreed to copy and paste this 10,000 word document for Wax out of Adobe Acrobat notes into MS Word. Like, one note per line/paragraph/sentence sometimes. And there's a balloon in my head.

The world hates me. Fuckit.

Did I ever tell you guys that Patrick Stewart and Brent Spiner are best friends? I wish someone other than me had written some RPS about them.

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Guitarist Joe Trohman on the cover of Fall Out Boy's new single and my dad, age 30 (accompanied by half of my mom's face).

Send the Troh back in time to meet me at age 4 and I could be fooled! Well. In long sleeves and glasses.

and also, you're supposed to DO something with dramatic irony, not just create it and leave it there

Auuurgh.

In a crime procedural that follows a case while also including an element of mystery, ie not an omniscient narrator, it's seriously damaging to your tension if you give away whodunnit less than halfway through the plot, then lead the investigators off on false leads.

Now, if you were making a horror movie and not a whodunnit, that type of dramatic irony would be exactly appropriate. But unless your plot is going to turn waaaaaaaaay around into a thriller - and I can already tell that it's not - then you need to make the breadcrumbs you leave in the narration subtle enough that the reader doesn't get bored later.