new arashi rps story: a series of attempts by matsumoto jun to paint his fingernails

[cimorene]

a series of attempts by matsumoto jun to paint his fingernails (≈6300 words)
arashi rps (my arashi tag; introduction posts here, here and here; aiba/jun posts here and here)
matsumoto jun/aiba masaki (background ohno satoshi/ninomiya kazunari), r
this is a birthday present for the sublime aeslis; beta and also that incredibly adorable embedded illustration by the inimitable elfiepike. thanks also to my buddy perhael for second opinions.

The day was over, and looking back on it with hindsight, it did not look good. Jun had eaten nothing but sushi rice, Sho's excellent coffee, and vending machine tea. He'd cut himself, his nail polish had been ruined three times and Nino's shoes once, he still had a headache, and they had another studio session tomorrow morning. Also, he was almost out of people to paint his nails.

Comments

[angel-enchanted.livejournal.com]

nice!! i wanna know more!!


[eto...would you mind posting this over at arashirabu? prease join as well ;D!!]

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thank you!

[hontowa.livejournal.com]

Ahh I loved it <3 I loved how it was all done like an Aiba experiment and how you captured so many little personality quirks of the members ^_^ Great job!

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thanks! more things should be conducted in the manner of a no arashi. the world would be a happier place.

[yumenoko.livejournal.com]

I have no idea how long that took for you to write (I imagine days and days and days) but it worth every minute! That thing is publishable, it's so good. Seriously, the clever idea, the attention to all the details, the grammar (oh! the grammar!), the imagery, the mood; and everything all bundled up to read so smooth and fluid. Thank you for sharing this!!!!!

[cimness.livejournal.com]

heeee, thank you; that's a high compliment! i'm glad you enjoyed it. this story wasn't especially time-consuming except in that i spent so much time watching tv and procrastinating between writing the scenes, but it was probably about a week between starting and finishing the first draft anyway. XD

[elfiepike.livejournal.com]

you know i totally love it. ♥ ♥ ♥

[cimness.livejournal.com]

♥ ♥ :O your feedback was already the best!

[originaru.livejournal.com]

I just love, love the writing style. Simplistic, but fleshy. Your characterization was wonderful. :D

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thank you! this sort of style is what happens when i aim at a conversational narrative voice more or less, because i can never completely leave out my little flights of fancy. :) i'm glad you enjoyed my characterisation!

[na-chan989.livejournal.com]

i actually really enjoyed this fic! im not usually a yaoi person unless it's done in a crack-like fashion, but this one seemed just right. The characterisation seemed so fitting, that it isn't hard to imagine them actually doing this sort of stuff! I'm in wonderment...but nonetheless it was enjoyable - well done! ^__^

[cimness.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.