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cimorenethis is wrong. i mean, it's a goddamned gorgeous story, but this:
His face felt too hot. "Ray, please. Please. I don't want to talk. I don't want to think, I don't want to think, I just don't want to-"
if he doesn't want to talk that badly, he isn't going to say 'i don't want to talk.' 'i don't want to talk' is what he'd say if what he meant was 'rarr, i'm horny,' but this is the thorny emotional insecurity way, and that way is like a genuine skin-crawling when talking comes up, sort of like, say, arachnophobia. he'd say something different--nothing at all, or he would try to change the subject.
edit: she gets 95, not 100, because she disturbed the perfection just a little with the lyrics at the end.
His face felt too hot. "Ray, please. Please. I don't want to talk. I don't want to think, I don't want to think, I just don't want to-"
if he doesn't want to talk that badly, he isn't going to say 'i don't want to talk.' 'i don't want to talk' is what he'd say if what he meant was 'rarr, i'm horny,' but this is the thorny emotional insecurity way, and that way is like a genuine skin-crawling when talking comes up, sort of like, say, arachnophobia. he'd say something different--nothing at all, or he would try to change the subject.
edit: she gets 95, not 100, because she disturbed the perfection just a little with the lyrics at the end.
