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cimoreneThe ensign shifted uncomfortably. "I was wondering if you had any plans."
The helmsman's smile broadened evily. "I might."
The navigator frowned. "Nothing elaborate, I hope."
wow, it's been a long time since i've seen such a bad instance of appositive syndrome as this. i didn't get more than a few paragraphs in. how can you write like that, let alone read it?
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The helmsman's smile broadened evily. "I might."
The navigator frowned. "Nothing elaborate, I hope."
wow, it's been a long time since i've seen such a bad instance of appositive syndrome as this. i didn't get more than a few paragraphs in. how can you write like that, let alone read it?
eta: there are only two people in that conversation.
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Date: 21 May 2005 09:09 am (UTC)i think i've just been killed by bad writing.