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[cimorene]

there are plots floating around in my head and colliding. this is not producing the usual result of one of them demanding to be written--it just makes my head hurt. maybe i will take some ibuprofen. am thinking blond thoughts all of a sudden and also about the outer corners of a boy's eyes, which are very nice, but rarely get any attention. eyelashes+water=way overused; must not return to that. and then there's dom/billy and the orli-gets-dehydrated plot that was going to use lij as an extra character without any sexual tension between them. now also have mutliple nsync plots. that star trek iv plot bunny that won't leave me alone since last summer. vague thoughts about cars and spaghetti, and imagination. and the power of--something. my subconscious is churning. am not in a fic-writing-worthy state yet, for anything but crap or smut-schmoop, which i do like, rather, but. but. feel my writing has been going downhill from "burn": "kiss," "arkansas," "home" and the birthday het vampire story were all worse. and i know this is because of not trying. i have story-feelers. i have to use them to prevent stories from unbalancing themselves and coming out the wrong shape.

damn, i sound like--i need to go to bed.

right after this greek homework.

[edit- i suck and i hate my computer. going to turn it off. then i'll be able to work. oh the pain.]

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[cimness.livejournal.com]

well, there is a note about it in tennessee. tennessee is split between past tense (i wrote) and present tense (i write) and future tense (i will write). so there's stuff that happened before (new zealand), stuff that's happening now (camping in tennessee, first road trip), and stuff that hasn't happened yet (future).

burn is split between present (i write, i come), past (i wrote, i came) and past perfect (i had written, i had come). past perfect= things that happened in the distant past. ie, you stand in the past and look back on--the past of the past, if that makes sense. that is for their old history up until sean's wife leaves him. then it switches to simple past at the end of "ashes," and it's that from the time christine goes until the night when they walk outside/first have sex. that night starts the present, and the rest is in the present.

of course, the different timelines are mixed up a little.

having english as a non-native language has got to screw you up something fierce with this.

first person: i write
second: you write
third: he writes
plural first, third: we write, they write

i'd say it's heavily stylized. emotion is closely linked to the natural world. in tennessee, there is a lot of domestic--linking. not just imagery, a la the cat, the teapot, but a lot of dialogue, etc --situations. you know. it's third-person narrator (ie, i say "viggo says/said," not "i say/said" or "you say/said"), but i blend third-person and first. the narrator doesn't know everything--it's really viggo (or lij, or sean) talking through that filter, and what and how they think is reflected in their phrasing. ie, during sex and highly emotional moments, there are more incomplete sentences. it's also very lyrical, a lot of focus on the way things sound, a lot of adjective and fused metaphor, a lot of breaking the traditional rules of english composition--with a purpose, of course, not because i don't know them :).

--is that what you were talking about?

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[kmazzy.livejournal.com]

oh. even the way you describe your pretty writing is pretty.

i understand a lot better now and after reading the explanation on the web page. but like i said, this means tonight i must reread both tonight with a new perspective and understanding.

#vou pelos campos a perguntar onde estas...#
have that in my head now. i'd better not be singing it at work all day or i will get frowned upon.