fic post: sga: "instantaneous", sheppard/mckay, nc-17, 129K

[cimorene]

instantaneous
by cimorene
sheppard/mckay, nc-17, mid-s1, 129K
beta by isilya and giddygeek (♥!) and invaluable help from kaneko, julad and wax_jism.

"God, life is so unfair.  I find what appears to be the sole personal teleportation device in the city, it decides it likes you, and what do you do with it?  Save the city with a stunning feat of bravery and tactical prowess?  No.  You don't even bring me coffee--you use it to increase your repertoire of juvenile humour with a prank that three-year-olds have been carrying off successfully without teleportation probably for centuries."

Comments

[isiscolo.livejournal.com]

Woo! I love "unexpected consequences of Ancient gadget" stories! This was a lot of fun. I particularly liked this bit:

"I see, sort of like trying to run Windows software on a Mac."

"Hah! More like trying to run OS X on an Apple IIe. Anything else?"

Hee. And the ending was perfect.

[claire.livejournal.com]

Lovely! <3

[silviakundera.livejournal.com]

Oh my oh my. I hundred thousand squees. A squee heard round the world.

Excitement! Adventure! Sweeping romance! COFFEE.

I adore your crush laden John somuch. and oh, and Rodney love. So good.

Fantastic characterization, and actually interesting plottiness. Plus, really hot sexage stuff. Mmmmmmm....

Thank you kindly.

[copracat]

That was with the making of the happy and also, the excellence.

[copracat]

Also, meteor strike! What's not to love about that?

[xanphibian.livejournal.com]

DAMN that was excellent. Thank you so, so much.

I loved the characterizations. It was smart and hot and I loved the way you kept it all in John's POV to keep us guessing about Rodney's take on things. Loved that. The writing is excellent, the dialogue spot-on, and the plot was very engaging.

[micehell]

That had all of my favorite things in it - John and Rodney, long, stunningly detailed plot, and wonderful writing. Mucho thankses for that.

[spikedluv]

Great story! I love it when the boys play with Ancient toys. *g* And the John/Rodney interaction was wonderfully done.

[01100100.livejournal.com]

Great stuff. I had *a lot* fun reading this fic. Very cool story :-)

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

He smelled sharp with soap, and John was crazy, because even though he knew how soap tasted, he still wanted to lick him.

That's love, right there. *g*

That was a wonderful Ancient gadget and your Rodney-obsessed John was adorable and very believable.

[alasen.livejournal.com]

This was fantastic - I really enjoyed it, thank you.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thank you! i love ancient gadget stories too. i think the fake technology is my favourite part of sf. and silly pseudoscience makes me all shivery and happy on tv (well, the astrophysics part does, the pseudo-medicine-biology-genetics makes me want to throw things), even in its super-silly star trek forms sometimes. the gadget was surprisingly fun to hammer out, mentally--almost like getting to play with it myself. ;)

and thanks so much for the feedback!

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thank you! :)

[northern]

Happy! Thank you for writing such a long story. I love long stories.

The hiccupping was an especially nice detail. :)

[cimness.livejournal.com]

*grin* thank you for cute, squeeful feedback that was really enjoyable to read! unfortunately i'm blushing and don't really know what to say so um. but hi, i'm really glad you liked it so much and... love!

also, crush-laden john is like a kink or something for me, seriously. nnng.

and also really hot sexage stuff? yay! and interesting because i felt like i was kind of going light on it. i'm glad you didn't feel it was skimpy. :)

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thanks for the feedback! :) glad it worked for you.

long stories can be a bitch to write, but i agree, they are wonderful to read.

(and credit where credit is due, the hiccuping idea was originally julad's, albeit slightly modified.)

[cimness.livejournal.com]

nothing whatever, and a lot of that love should go to julad, including for the dialogue from "nothing new here" to "well, that was different", which i thought was so hilarious that i had to snitch it wholesale.

but yeah, i have to admit to a certain slightly morbid fascination for meteor strikes--my research kinda made me want to see one though in the end, that natural disaster element would probably keep me away.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

and also--*grin*. thank you for the feedback!

[cimness.livejournal.com]

thanks! and thank you for the feedback!

it's interesting you mention point of view--i never even considered switching to rodney's with this story, although i have written back-and-forth stories before. sheppard's head is such an infinitely, incredibly fascinating place, i feel like you could wander around for days there, and i guess immersing the story in his pov let me think more about it.

and dialogue, man, mmmh, dialogue. one of the most enjoyable parts of the show, the reading, and the writing. there's nothing more fun than witty banter. i'm so glad it worked for you!

and hey, adorable icon, by the way.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

i have to admit that those are all some of my favourite things too. thank you for the feedback and the compliments, and for making me smile.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

i'm glad you liked it! mmmmh, john/rodney interaction.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

i'm pleased you liked it--thanks for letting me know!

[cimness.livejournal.com]

That's love, right there.

*nods* that kind of insanity is one of the most reliable early warning signs. but then again, i think in his position i'd do the same. ;)

and thank you for the compliments and taking the time to leave them. i think rodney-obsessed john is a pet idea with me that could easily have gone a little overboard. so i'm happy to know it convinced you!

[monkeypumpkin.livejournal.com]

I love you.

[crysothemis.livejournal.com]

*thud*

::picks self off floor, dusts self off, readjusts glasses::

Wow, that was gorgeous. Long and plotty (hee! ancient tech with details! and limits! and consequences!) and sexy and delicious. I have a secret thing for stories where the sexual tension is real and present but understated and nothing gets consummated until almost the end, and this one pushed all those buttons *perfectly*.

The details were marvelous -- the voices, the characterization, the coffee. I couldn't stop reading (which made getting breakfast kind of difficult).

Yum.