a hard concept

[cimorene]

if you have to say "feedback is welcome but please be gentle"--especially in accompaniment with "this is my first fic"--don't post it.

eta:

two bad signs for a first line:

+incorrect grammar
+coyness

Comments

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Wow. Coyness. This is going to sound weird, but coyness has been annoying me in slash for years and I never quite had a word for the concept.

Thank you for helping me name my annoyances.

[cimness.livejournal.com]

you know, i've never had a word for it before, but it was definitely one of two flaws in the sentence, and i frowned at the screen a bit and it came to me like magic.